Love American Style by Nadalia Bagratuni

Story: 2

Presentation: 5

Total: 7

Publisher: Mystic Moon Press

Contemporary Erotic 17 Pages

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Blurb: Julie Snyder was born into the thirteenth generation of the United States. The generation that probably wouldn't do as well as their parents. Just two generations past the greatest generation, Julie represents a new and different outlook for our society. A society without defined borders or morals. She discovers when she attends college just exactly what Love American Style means in the twenty first century. Her grandparents were part of the Greatest Generation and she is fighting like to hell not to become part of America's Last Generation.

Review: Oy Vey! I am just not sure where to begin. The story starts with a typical family going on summer vacation. Low and behold the parents tell the kids during the car ride that they are getting divorced and will be spending their vacation separately. Mom with daughter and father with son. That in itself is not bad, but when mom starts telling daughter she should start wearing skimpier clothes and she might get lucky.......well, not my idea of a "mom". Here is one of the quotas from mom to daughter.......

"Why not, if you dress the part, you may get lucky. Besides you have been so tense lately I figure a good fucking would really help you out." This is from a mother to her college age daughter. and by college I gather that the girl is a freshman in college so we are talking about 18 maybe 19.

At one point mom and daughter go on a double date together. Mom takes her date into the bushes for a quickie while daughter finds out that her date is just with her so he can screw the mom. Suddenly mom rushes out of the woods alone, her boyfriend has croaked. Daughter goes to the body to take care of it because mom doesn't want anyone to know she fucked him to death. It would ruin her sex life.

While daughter is taking care of the body, mom gives the daughters date a BJ so he won't say anything about what happened.

Then daughter goes over seas, bangs a Count. Mom lets her know she is getting married to a man daughter assumes is her dad. She goes to the wedding only to find out the man her mom is marrying is the Count she was banging, while he dad is marrying the daughters roommate!

HOLY CRAP! I know, I know, I just ruined the story for you. :) But tell me, do you still want to read it?

It Was in the Cards by Angeline Fiore

Story: 6

Presentation: 4

Total: 10

Publisher: Mystic Moon Press

Contemporary 22 Pages

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Blurb: Miranda Dubois longs for a tall, handsome man to take her away from her carnival life. Too many towns, and one night stands, have left her feeling like she will never find love. With every tarot card reading she gives, she dreams of seeing her own future and finding her soul mate.

Since inheriting the Mystic Dragon Occult Shoppe, Edward Jove hasn't had a moment to himself. Business obligations have kept him from enjoying his shop's success, and from finding that special someone. If he can't find love, at least he can have a little fun at the carnival.

Amidst the glitter of the midway lights, two lonely people move closer to each other. Will this magical night bring them together or keep them apart? There is only one way to find out . . .

Review: Oy Vey! Were to start? The story itself was cute. It had a good idea but the editing was almost non existant! When the same word changes spelling a couple times through the story there are issues. Is it Carney...or Carnie? The flip flop back and forth with that really irked me.

The steamy vouyer scene was nice, the hot sex with Edward was great. The characters really pulled me in and made me smile. The author did a great job that could have been made much better with decent editing. The editing was the main issue with me. It read as if it was the first round draft, though that did not take away from the story, only made it a little less appealing.

At $1.29 I have to say that it was worth the cash even with the poor editing